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FJT150

Joined: 01 Mar 2003

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poem Posted: 11 May 2003 12:32 AM
i am tired and very weary looking for some hope and wish it would find me talking to the lord up above asking if he will show me some love, all my homees are dead or gone away hit the grave or in prison is were they stay cant complain cuz im in pain taken its toll from living this game asking myself were do i fit what the hell a nigga got to do 4 it cuz ive paid all kind of dues ya,its just im destine to lose, going crazy wishing i was dead held a gun up to my head, cant take my life showing that i am weak gotta move on cant be a pussy geek want to stay buzzed on the kill shit so i can avoid all of this dont have to remain loyal to it have to disdain myself too-what a bicth now the memories are bugging me producing such pain and misery wish it would go away and set me free having visoins of better things and i can see all my enemies are gone or squash any beefs what a fucken wish that would be-for me living a diffrent way not knowing the evil things living free and enjoying even the little things nothing but a future up ahead in my road thinking the way u should of from what im told but enough of the pipe dreams all my fantasize got wake up cuz im still in the real life and drop my guard of in la la land bloaw u a one dead worthless man
FLAMINGO & SWENSON 09-07-1960 D.O.B

A2pacThought

Joined: 08 Jan 2003

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Re: poem Posted: 11 May 2003 12:43 AM
I think your more of a rapper. Not that the poem is bad, but from studying poetry (EX: LANGSTON HUGHES), you don't got the ''poets tounge''.. Good peice, especially because it's from the heart.
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FJT150

Joined: 01 Mar 2003

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Re: poem Posted: 11 May 2003 01:59 AM
i would have to agree A2T,i would have too agree thanks tho 4 the construtive critisism. i like 2 call it honesty.i appreciate it.
FLAMINGO & SWENSON 09-07-1960 D.O.B

Amanifadia

Joined: 27 Mar 2003

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Re: poem Posted: 11 May 2003 03:10 AM
straight from the heart shit, I love that. Where you at JT? I miss talkin to you. U need ur therapy remember ? I hope tha health is good. I loved the poem though but like a2t said , i also think ur more of a rapper, some of ur poems are really excellent though. Keep it up poppa
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Tupac1984

Joined: 25 Feb 2003

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Re: poem Posted: 19 May 2003 05:34 PM
I liked it; it's deep and that's the kind of stuff I like, your a good story teller and obviousley a deep thinker - keep up the good work.
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Re: poem Posted: 19 May 2003 09:43 PM
Excellent as usual JT. Quality writing, can tell ya meant it all as usual bro. Keep it up JT. Ya know I'm always here for ya. Peace
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fjsdoter150

Joined: 26 May 2003

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Re: poem Posted: 26 May 2003 07:32 AM
once again daddy............u have some talent! i love you!
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savH2

Joined: 21 Mar 2003

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Re: poem Posted: 27 May 2003 12:35 AM
that was good...i do agree with ATupacThought tho...u do sound like more of a rapper. but i loved the poem, it was deep, and straight from the heart. good job

FJT150

Joined: 01 Mar 2003

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Re: poem Posted: 05 Jun 2003 07:49 AM
thanks i really app ur comments very much
FLAMINGO & SWENSON 09-07-1960 D.O.B

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